Haiku -- My First Attempt!
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Lines of Harmony
This is my first attempt at Haiku and I used the style of Haiku that is 5/7/5 syllables in three lines and referring to something that has to do with the earth or nature. I hope you enjoy them! Each Haiku are separate from the ones before it. Haiku is easy to write but takes some serious thinking.
I lay down tonight
With open book on my chest
Wind fans the pages
Not sure I belong
In this time and place on earth
The dark night takes me
Sand under my feet
I leave many tracks behind
Follow them or not
Autumn gives us winter
Leaves the past behind us all
Spring brings us flowers
Standing on mountain
At the top I am shining
The sun beams off me
Curiously blind
I seek knowledge and kindness
Lead me to the truth
Capture the essence
Of raindrops on a flower
See it inside you
Storms rage upon us
Yet we are safely secured
By an unknown light
Your arms hold me tight
The night gives me love and hope
Kiss me and wonder
For better or worse
Beyond the rich and the poor
Sunlight gives me love
Perspective I keep
Eyes ponder the moments of
Ever-changing seasons
The valley calls me
On memories of descent
Aim for the sun now
Speak of erosion
The water chops away again
The shore is still mine
Harmoniously
Birds in tree heaven cackle away
Telltale signs of change
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thanks, Frank!
Great job with your first Haiku. I especially like
"Sand under my feet
I leave many tracks behind
Follow them or not"
Have you considered giving each one a title? That would separate them. Or possibly add a related photograph before or after each one. Let me warn you that Haiku is addictive!!
Keith this was great..I also gave my first stab at Haiku..I really liked it alot..Hyph has started something..lol
Yours was fantastic..Thank you.
Sunnie
Wow! Total great job. I really enjoyed reading it.
I think always exploring and I had the same Haiku moment about the same time. Haiku really is addictive!
Thanks for all your comments. I think I might do another one of these soon with the help of all of you!
Hi Keith ~ You certainly have the hang of it and each one a special poem unto itself. Blessings, Debby
hi keith, very nice for your first try at haiku poems and thank you for your positive response to my poem. I like to keep my poems as short as I can otherwise they tend to loose the power of the words themselves. I will have to try some haiku one day. can't get any shorter then that. thumbs up on your haiku.
Beautiful poem. Thanks for sharing!
Frank Atanacio Level 8 Commenter 6 months ago
This little series of Haiku was done right.. you clearly stuck to the true nature of Haiku being a three line unrhymed Japanese verse form.. Up and fantastic